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“Subject number seven-six-nine, please step into the light and take a seat,” said the voice. It came from above, but also from all around, and it was meliflous and multi-layered, multi-timbered. A chorus of a voice. An artificial voice, though Jana had no way of knowing whether there was a real person, speaking through a microphone that was run through voice augmentation, watching her, or whether her only audience was artificial. Her mentor, had told her that she wouldn’t be afraid by the time reached this point in the evaluation, and even though the room was cool and dark but for the column of light illuminating the plain wood and metal stool five feet in front of her, she didn’t exactly feel fear. Just apprehension that she wouldn’t be judged worthy to become an agent.

As she moved toward the stool, she felt languid and graceful and she realized that there was also a bit of a taste in the back of her throat. They were pumping drugs into her IV now from somewhere behind the wall. Maybe those were also contributing to keeping anxiety at bay. She would need to be careful. She knew her examiners were seeking the truth about her, about whether she really was a good fit for this position. She wondered if all candidates got the same cocktail of drugs or if they were tailored to genetic profiles. Either way, she was ready. She took a deep breath admiring how good it felt to feel her chest expand and then contract.

She took a seat on the hard stool, tucking her left leg under her, but leaving her right a bit forward. She felt balanced and contemplative and secure. The voice came from above, but she looked straight ahead as the light warmed and dimmed a little. It was safest to assume that there were cameras on her from multiple angles.

“The first series of questions we have for you are word associations. We will give you a word and we want you to relay your impressions associated with that word back to us,” said the voice. Jana was sure that the voice, which was still more like a chorus of four or five different speakers layered together- was speaking at a normal tempo, but her mind was racing and she anticipated most of the words before they began. She felt like her mind was running at triple speed. There was definitely something potent running through her IV. She could still taste something foreign, but not unpleasant, just at the back of her throat. The taste was more herbal than metallic, though she couldn’t quite place it, and that was somehow reassuring.

“The first word we want you to explain your impressions of is ‘chemistry’”said the voice.

Chemistry. . . Chemistry. . . So multilayered. It made her think first of water. The chemistry of life as she knew it depended completely on the chemistry of water.

She was struck by a hazy early memory. Learning to swim with her parents and her great grandfather in the little springfed pond behind her great grandparents’ house. She was only just talking, but the whole family lived along the river. They taught her to swim early. Her great grandpa loved to swim. She remembered the day that he first judged her ready to hold onto his back for a swim around the deep end. “Hold your breath when we go down and hang on and look at the little minnows and fishes!” She remembered the blurry way everything looked in the little pond through open eyes and the flashes of movement of the little fishes and the cool clear water.

Chemistry. Her great grandmother had studied chemistry, long ago and far away, when not many women studied the central science in college. But then she had pulled up her roots from the learned Midwest and followed her husband to the wilds of Florida to build a lodge and help found a town. Chemistry between her great grandparents had been enough for them both to break ties with the cities and friends that they knew and launch them on a great adventure. Although Jana didn’t really know if it had felt like a great adventure to them at the time. She had known her grandparents as an older child and young teen, but lost her greats much earlier.

Layered within the voice were low slow timbers and melodic sopranos that ignited thoughts of physical chemistry in Jana. But she knew that the voice might be disembodied from people that could actually make those sounds.

Chemistry and biology and psychology defined people. Chemistry and physics defined chips. But chips were programmed by people.

She was ready to answer.

Her own voice was steady and she was pretty sure she was able to keep it at a normal pace.

“Chemistry includes the concepts that define the specific heat capacity of water, which in turn has given rise to life as it evolved on earth,” she began.

Somewhere within the building machines began to alert human handlers that they should tune in and provide feedback in realtime.

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Fellow idollers and internet friends of all types, I hope you enjoy this vignette! My house is full of the stress of applications and tests right now with a pair of high school Seniors sweating through the questions of how best to present themselves. So this concept was not a great reach. I also feel like it layers well with the concept of an open topic. Please don’t forget about me when the poll goes up if you enjoyed this story or it made your palms a little sweaty for Jana!

Date: 2026-09-21 01:56 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] muchtooarrogant
or it made your palms a little sweaty for Jana!
Yeah, that was going to be my first comment to you, that okay she's not scared, but I was certainly scared for her. Great creepy vibes in the beginning, especially with the drugs.

I loved her free association with the word chemistry. It felt real, particularly in the context of drug enhanced thinking, and I really didn't expect her answer to sound so dry. :)

Great work!

Dan

Date: 2026-09-21 04:49 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bsgsix
I really love what you did here - the beginning was absolutely captivating (anything going into someone's IV immediately makes me stop and wonder what's REALLY happening), and the idea of a word creating a memory to assist a concept makes a lot of sense, especially when, in real life, you are living that with your own family. This reminds me a lot of when I used to teach the SAT to high school juniors, who all felt so... beyond stressed that their parents would give them Xanax and then, they'd be so entirely exhausted and foggy that they'd miss questions on the test. It was A Time for certain, and I didn't envy them that.

I felt the intrigue here, and it definitely made my palms a bit sweaty for Jana! Well written and wonderfully worded! <3

Date: 2026-09-21 07:25 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] humanbeansradio
The layered voice is wonderfully creepy, and I really liked the way ‘chemistry’ sent her mind branching off in so many directions. I’m very curious about what those machines noticed at the end!

Date: 2026-09-21 09:41 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] pixiebelle
This was intriguing. The IV line gave me a chill, as I suspect it was supposed to be. The taste in the back of the throat is familiar for me having gone through chemo, so that extra detail really made it feel real.

Date: 2026-09-21 12:01 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] gardeningatnight
It's interesting that despite being drugged in some way that when she's asked to share impressions of a word, ultimately what she says is very dry and technical, despite the rush of associations she experiences.

Date: 2026-09-21 04:37 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] scribblesinblue
There is so much space between words here, in the best way. I'm curious about what position Jana is a candidate for, whether "subject seven-six-nine" has counted up from zero, the purpose of the IV drugs, and of course who the human handlers are and what their realtime feedback might be like.

I had to do that word-association thing when I auditioned for a spot in the college DJ rotation - my word was "sky" and now I don't remember what I said but it was good enough to get a time slot.

Date: 2026-09-21 05:37 pm (UTC)
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Oh, this absolutely made my palms a little sweaty for Jana! 😂 There’s something deeply unsettling about her sitting alone under that light, knowing she’s being evaluated but not knowing exactly who—or what—is evaluating her, while also realizing that something is being fed through her IV. The fact that she feels unusually calm only makes it creepier, because we know that calm isn’t entirely hers.

I also loved what you did with the word “chemistry.” Her mind takes this beautiful wandering journey through water, childhood, her great-grandfather, her great-grandmother, relationships, biology, psychology, and the difference between people and machines...and then what actually comes out of her mouth is this perfectly composed, academic answer about the specific heat capacity of water. 😂 That contrast tells us so much about Jana and about the evaluation itself. And then the final reveal that machines are monitoring her but summoning *human* handlers to provide feedback added another layer to my biggest question: exactly what kind of agent are they trying to determine whether Jana is capable of becoming? I definitely want more of this world.

Date: 2026-09-21 08:47 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] adoptedwriter
It made me think of what would I respond with. The IV….(((shudders)))…

Date: 2026-09-22 03:36 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] penpusher
Yes, I remember your name from a previous season! And yeah, the dreaded applications can seem like a set of unseen people looking from all different angles and asking questions that appear to have no "correct" answers in order to be accepted!

Best wishes for good chemistry, all around!

Date: 2026-09-22 07:13 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] halfshellvenus
I liked the backstory memories "chemistry" triggered for Jana, including the different meanings of "chemistry". And yes, I did feel nervous for her!

Date: 2026-09-23 12:05 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] ofearthandstars
Oh, this is wonderfully fun and chilling! I appreciate the background bit, too, knowing that your high schoolers are probably trying to figure out if they will be evaluated by humans or machines, and how well that plays out in the setting you've created. I think Jana is probably going to go far!

Date: 2026-09-23 08:13 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] drippedonpaper
Good luck with the high school seniors. Such excitement and stress. The last of my 3 is now away at her university. You will make it and, however it turns out, they will thrive. You've got this!

I do feel even when it comes to applying for jobs, somehow we are now seeking to ask machines if we are worthy. How things change. And how do machines measure worth? Sometimes the most important things about a person aren't things one can quantify and graph.

Your entry is very thought-provoking!

Date: 2026-09-24 03:30 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] bleodswean
Oh!!! This is fantastic!!! It simply is NOT a vignette, it's a complicated bit of writing in which you set the scene, created a character, challenged her, and then she rose to it whilst all of us - her and the reader - are left contemplating what comes next. Very nice!

And best of luck to the kiddos!

Date: 2026-09-25 10:26 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] purplepetrichor
The IV and the taste in the back of her throat are so memorable/ring true.

Date: 2026-09-26 08:58 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] banana_galaxy
What an intriguing process to become an agent. And what kind of agent, I wonder? My first thought was FBI, but you weren't explicit, so maybe in this futuristic landscape this could be a process for becoming some other kind of agent.

Date: 2026-09-27 02:44 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] lapis_lazuli615
This is another entry that has such world developing that I want to see more! I hope some of Gary's prompts bring you back to it!
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